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Hey (: I quite liked this as a poem, although it is awfully sad... then again, there's something about sadness that makes it all the more powerful I think... A ...

I really like the idea behind this. Its unique and leaves your reader on an edge, so they are always questioning... which I think is a good thing... However... What ...

Silly people, of course pain can be sorrowful. Sorrow is pain in a sense, so pain is a form of sorrow as well. Another thing is that there really is ...

I didn't write this. The words just stumble out, so... :) I know exactly what you mean! But truly, I thought this was really good. I especially liked the style ...

Corrections in bold :) There is a man, you no should be know him no doubt , That stands and waggled a tense switch happened here.. should be waggles his ...

All right.... As others have said, welcome to YWS! And also as others have said, I'm sorry, but this really doesn't fall under the category of 'poetry.' However, we are ...

To dream is to hope, to hope is to want to want is a feeling comma thats what it means The last two lines of this stanza sound sort of ...

I hate to just repeat what everyone else has said, but, well.... that was nothing short of amazing. I love the style you write with; short, simple, to the point, ...

*Rushes to give gold star* I loved this! The way you wrote it makes me see it so vividly somehow, and more than that, feel it. It's very easy for ...

Wow. I am absolutely amazed at how powerful your writing is. The only things I can think of to correct are punctuation. The beginnings of your sentences should be capitalized ...

Here we go! Commentary in bold... Enemies? I have none. Grudges? I don’t recall. I have no need to avenge There should be a comma here... or to “regain my ...

I no what you think 'no' = know Its gonna be another boring poem About how somebody has unspoken able beauty Or just to short of a skirt 'to' = ...

Shunned by everything in the light They stare at you in spite You run away from the people who just see a face In this line I would substitute the ...

Once again, another brilliant story. This kept me so engaged the whole time that I forget to look for mistakes..... Scanning back over, I can't even find any! I know ...

Something like this is the definition of short and sweet. Only 'sweet' probably isn't the best description word for this piece. Maybe magical. Wow. I know this isn't a helpful ...